Purdue’s Marching Band has been growing larger and larger since day one. The band has also been invited to travel to international places such as China. Though all of these things are great, funding may be hindering the band. Purdue University only gives so much money to the band every year. 65% of the bands funding comes from personal donations. Without these people’s kind donations the band wouldn’t be what it is today.
English 106 - Purdue All American Marching Band 
Being a member of the band myself, I totally understand what this post is about. There are a couple of things that could use more detail, though. First of all, I feel that you could list a few more international visits than just China, and maybe even include future plans such as the Ireland trip. Secondly, where did you find the 65% statistic at? Listing where you found that will make this post more credible. Other than that, great post.